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 1515 North Bearss Ave.

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PostSubject: 1515 North Bearss Ave.   Sat Jul 12, 2008 9:09 pm

CHAPTER 1
1515 NORTH BEARSS AVE.


Debbie and Tom are newly weds and just bought there first home at 1515 North Bearss Ave. Today is there first day that they moved in. So they started to bring there boxes in and all of their furniture. But they stopped because they heard a noise like foot steps. “Tom did you hear that?” Debbie asked franticly, “TOM DID YOU HEAR THAT?”
”Honey please calm down”, Tom said reassuringly “You and I are the only ones that are in this house, it was probably just the wind”
”That better be true” Debbie said worrying.
So they continued to unpack their cloths, their pictures, and their personal items when they herd the foot steps again. But they were closer and they herd scratching on the walls. “Oh my gosh Tom you cant say you did not here that” Debbie said apprehensively.
“Ok honey I'll go look and see if anyone is in here besides me and you.” Tom said.
As soon as he walked out the door Debbie heard him scream.
“Oh my god Tom are you ok?” screamed Debbie.
Tom came around the corner laughing, “Yes dear I'm fine I'm just trying to lighten up the mood”
“Don't you ever do that to me again you know I hate being scared”, Debbie yelled back at him.
So Tom went around the house but did not see or hear anything weird. But then, he walked into the study and found- a- raccoon walking around.
”Honey I think I found the problem,” Tom yelled across the house to Debbie.
So Tom came back in the master bedroom with Debbie. They finished unpacking there clothes and sheets for their bed.
”I'm hungry.” Tom told Debbie,
”Ok babe I'll order some pizza what do you want on it?” Debbie asked,
”Umm, just get the works please”
So Debbie called the local pizza shop, Amber's Pizzeria, and ordered the works.
”Hello thank you for calling Amber's Pizzeria may I take your order” Amy the phone operator asked.
”A yes can I have the works”
”Yes you can what size?”
”Tom how hungry are you”
”Umm, let's just say that I can eat 5 turkey dinners” Tom told Debbie.
”Ok, can I have a large?”
”Yes you may, that will be $17.50”
”Ok thank you I live at 1515 North Bearss Ave.”
”Ok your pizza will be there in 35 to 45 minuets or less, if not than its free”.
”Ok thank you”
So after Debbie called the pizza shop she went back and sat on the couch with Tom and waited for the pizza.

”Sweetie the pizza is taking forever” Debbie told Tom.
”Ya it is I'll call the shop and ask about it”
So Tom called, he got the busy signal, and then tried again, and he got threw.
”Hello thank you for calling Amber's Pizzeria may I help you.”
”Hi yes, me and my wife ordered a pizza an hour and a half ago and we have not received it yet”
”Ok what's your address?”
”1515 North Bearss Ave.”
”Ok I sent Kip out 35 minuets ago, he's not there yet?”
”No he’s not and I'm hungrier than ever”
”Yes sir I'm going to send you another pizza”
”No thank you my wife and I have already heated up some frozen dinners so no thanks”
Tom got so mad he hung up the phone.
”Sweetie the pizza guy's truck is outside so where's our pizza?” Debbie asked
”I don't know I'm going to go outside and teach that pizza guy a good lesson!” Tom said.
”Ok Tom but be nice to the poor guy, you never know if something happened to him so that's why he's hasn't given us the pizza yet.” Debbie told him.
Tom puts on his dark brown boots and gets the keys and unlocks the door.
”Tom I want to go with you to say something to him to.” Debbie commanded Tom.
So they went outside and start to walk to his car, as they start walking they see Kip in the car and start to wonder why his head is on the steering wheel and the door opened.
”Tom go see if he's ok please,” Debbie told Tom
”Honey he probably has a headache, nothings wrong,” Tom told Debbie to calm her fears.
So Tom goes to the car and starts shaking Kip to wake him up. Kip is not moving or breathing and then Tom gets blood spatter on his shirt and his face.
”Oh my god Debbie call the police”, Tom told Debbie
”Why do I need to call them?”
”Because I think the pizza guy is seriously hurt!”
Debbie went running to the house and grabbed her cell phone and dialed 911.
”911 what is your emergency”
”Someone is not responding what I do” at this point Debbie is freaking out
”Ma'am please calm down and tell me where you live”
”I live at 1515 North Bearss Ave.”
”Ok we are sending emergency vehicles now”
The police, ambulance, and a fire truck came in less than 10 minuets.
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PostSubject: Re: 1515 North Bearss Ave.   Thu Jul 17, 2008 10:01 am

Still very good! Can't wait to read the rest! Very Happy

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PostSubject: Re: 1515 North Bearss Ave.   Thu Jul 17, 2008 11:41 am

This is sooo interesting! Great job! Very Happy

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