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 The Mysteries of Love, Time & Fortune Cookies

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PostSubject: The Mysteries of Love, Time & Fortune Cookies   Fri Jul 04, 2008 10:59 am

Chapter 1: Our First Step Towards Adventure

Everyday is always the same. Go to school, take a nap in class, come home, pretend to do homework, eat dinner, watch tv, and then sleep. Big whoop. I’ve always wished that just once something, different would happen. Of course, my big adventure just had to happen on the one day I ran into him before school. And it just had to happen when in a different way than I’d ever expected.

Amber sighed as she swung her schoolbag, on the way to another boring old day in class.

This stinks, she thought. Why can’t all the teachers decide to play hooky and skip school. Or why can’t a space ship show up and take the school to an inter-galactic zoo, or…

POW!

She had been so focused on daydreaming, that she hadn’t been watching where she had been going and as a result, had walked face first into a lamp post.

“Ouch!” She shouted, pressing a hand over her nose which left as though it had grown to the size of a watermelon. “who put that there?”

Any hopes that she had walking away from the incident with her pride intact was shattered when she heard the laughter.

Oh, great, she thought, trying to compose herself as she quickly turned around. There are 973,672 people in San Jose, the only one to see that was him.

And sure enough, who else did she see when she turned around, but Will, wearing the same smirk he went through life with on his lips. Amber turned around again, intending to ignore him and continue on her way to a oh-so-wonderful day in school. But Will, of course, had to ruin her plan.

“Is it ok?” he asked, appearing next to her.

Amber blinked.

“What?” Was he actually being nice to her?

Will’s smirk grew as he answered.

“I meant the lamp post. Do you know how expensive they are to replace and just how many of our resources that they depleted?”

Amber turned red and raised her hand to punch him to the next century.

“HEY!”

The shout surprised her so much that she fell face first onto the ground.

“Man, your so violent, Amber.” A familiar voice said helping her up. It was Ruby, her childhood friend. “But only to Will,” Ruby continued, tapping her check with a finger. “I wonder why?”

Amber brushed the dirt from her clothes, turning her head to try to hide her pink checks, and replied dryly. “I refuse to even consider what your implying.”

“That’s Amber alright” Another voice said. It was Edward, a friend of Will’s. He elbowed Will in the ribs, causing him to wince. “Always using big words that no one understands to change the subject.”

Ruby glared at him. “Well, I understood her perfectly. Not everyone has the vocabulary of a two year old.”

Edward glared back. “Oh yeah? Well, we all can’t be nerds like you two.”

“We’re not nerds, we’re intellectuals!”

“Nerds! Geeks!”

Will and Amber simply stood and watched their friends who had tried to stop them from fighting, engage in battle themselves.

It was likely that the verbal war would have gone on longer if not for a fortunate, or perhaps unfortunate, interruption.

“Will you all just shut up? Noise is a form of pollution you know!”

It was Trinity, a bookworm who rarely was seen anywhere without a book less than 2 feet away form her. She had been trying to get past the four for awhile now, but everyone had been too caught in Ruby and Edward’s fight to notice her. And, now, she was understandably quite annoyed with them all.

“Look, there’s the biggest nerd of them all.” Edward said, only to hide behind Will a second later as Trinity sent him a bone chilling glare.

“Just wait,” she replied, continuing to glare at him. “one day, you’ll be working for me. And I will remember each and every insult and deduct it from your paycheck.”

“Scary.” Edward whispered, still hiding behind Will, as the other two girls giggled, at least, until Trinity turned her gaze on them.

“Where did you get that bag,” she snapped, pointing at Ruby’s new black bag, lined with white fur.
Ruby beamed and launched into a detailed explanation. She loved to show off whenever she could.

“Isn’t it cute? My father imported it for me, all the way from France! No one else here has it--”
Trinity interrupted. She pointed at the fur lining. “I don’t care about that. That’s real animal fur isn’t it? It’s from the Alaskan white wolf! They’re close becoming an endangered species! You can’t kill them for their fur to make a bag that can’t even hold all your school books!”

Ruby ignored her, pretending to yawn. “Big deal, who cares if there aren’t a few more scary wolves in the world.”
Amber tried to make peace as the boys just stood to the side smirking. “come one, let’s just forget about this and get to school.”

The two girls glared at each other. “Not with that puppy-killer.” Trinity said turning her head away from Ruby, who repeated the gesture, in the opposite direction. “No way I’m going to be seen with that Big Bad Wolf supporter.”

Everyone turned their heads to Ruby., which blinked. “What?”

Amber tried again. “C’mon, let’s just--OW!”

Something bounced off of Amber’s head and onto the ground.

“What is that?” Edward said, picking it up.

“A bag?” Will said, coming closer to get a better look.

“That hurt” sobbed Amber, forgotten.

“Let me see.” Ruby snatched the bag from Edward and opened it to find….

“Fortune Cookies?” Everyone but Amber said.

“Why would anyone throw a bag of fortune cookies on Amber.” Will mused taking the bag from Ruby. “Hope they didn’t break.”

One cookie fell onto the ground, unnoticed, when Will snatched the bag.

“Hey, let me see.” Edward said, pushing Will. Will bumped into Amber, who fell on top of the cookie on the ground, crushing it.

“Owww…”She moaned, clutching her nose.

“You broke it!” Ruby said, rushing forward,

“No, I think my nose is fine.” Amber started.

“I meant the cookies” Ruby replied, picking up a piece of paper from the crushed remains, not seeing Amber’s embarrassed and annoyed face. “Oooh, the fortune!”

Trinity snatched it from her hands. “Give me that, I’ll read it.”

The boys agreed, from a safe distance.

“Adventures come incognito,
Yours shall begin with a mystery.”


“What does that mean?’ Amber said, trying to see the paper.

No one had a chance to answer. A swirl of light surrounded them, and then they were gone.
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PostSubject: Re: The Mysteries of Love, Time & Fortune Cookies   Fri Jul 04, 2008 10:59 am

Chapter 2: Guests From a Different Realm

“AHHHHHH!”

The scream shattered through the calm that could only be found early on Saturday mornings, before the neighborhood brats awoke and stuffed themselves full of sugary cardboard bits and cartoons. The ones responsible for the disturbing of this calm however, were not hyper adolescents, but 5 teenagers who, due to an odd twist of fate had landed in the area they were presently occupying, rather than school. The aforementioned teens were currently lying in a bunch on the ground, near an area that had once been home to a respectable number of trees.

“Owww…” they all moaned, sitting up, and rubbing their various aching body parts.

“Did we get hit by a truck?” Edward asked, rubbing his head. “Because this is not how I pictured the afterlife to be like. Where’s the flying babies and lesser begins that I can boss around?”

“We didn’t get hit by a truck,” Trinity snapped, straightening her glasses. “For one thing, we were on the sidewalk.”

“So?” Will immediately replied, sticking up for his friend even with a face full of mud. “Like the truck couldn’t serve off the street to hit us?’

“I don’t know about the truck” Ruby said, still seated and fixing her hair. “But I’m quite sure you were dropped on your head as a baby, Edward. I mean, really, ’flying babies’”

Edward’s indignant “Hey” was drowned out by a pained groan.

“Ruuuuby…can you get off me now?”

“Oh,” Ruby said only now realizing exactly who she had been sitting. “I didn’t see you there Amber. You didn’t you say something?”

Amber could barely lift her head up but she managed to send Ruby a glare that promised vengeance.

Giggling slightly nervously, Ruby got up.

Edward smirked, and said. “Why’d you get up? It was so much more peaceful while Amber was getting cozy with the dirt.”

Amazingly, Amber recovered enough to attempt to strangle Edward, as Will moped in the background.

“Do you guys enjoy behaving like a trope of circus performers?” Trinity snapped. She had been scouring the area while her classmates had been behaving pretty much like she had told them they had been behaving like. “Have you even considered the idea of figuring out where we are?”

“Why? Where else can we be, except San Jose?” Will replied, his trademark smirk on his face.

Trinity glared in reply. “The last time I checked, San Jose did not house a recently cut down forest. Did you even bother to look around?”

Startled, the four, for the first time since their arrival, actually looked around. They were in the middle of no where. There were no homes, no buildings, no school (yay!), and nothing else that made San Jose, San Jose.

Ruby panicked “Where’s the mall? And Daddy’s office? And the air, it’s just too,” she paused, searching for a word.

“Clean.” Trinity said, sniffing the air, an expression of awe on her face. “Absolutely no air pollution. Where are we?’

“In boring old San Jose of course.” Edward replied, attempting to make jokes to dispel his growing anxiety. “Because I don’t remember getting on a plane, or car, or anything.”

“Unless you girls knocked us out and kidnapped us,” Will put in, eyeing several enormous boulders nearby with suspicion.

“Are you crazy?” Amber replied. “If we kidnapped you, then we certainly would not be here with you two right now. You couldn’t pay me to stay in the same room with you.” She had obviously not forgotten the dirt comment.

Will stuck his fingers his ears and ignored her. Meanwhile, Trinity had made a startling conclusion.

“It was the fortune cookie.” she announced. Everyone turned to look at her. The girls wondered if she had finally cracked form the strain of not reading a book for so long. Will was trying not to laugh out loud, as he had no wish to be given a lecture that used for complex words than simple ones.

Edward replied. “Finally someone believes! I told you they were trying to take over the world!”

Everyone turned to look at him.

He smiled. “What? Didn’t you ever think it was strange that there are little pieces of paper in those cookies that say things that no one understands. They’re brainwashing us with their fancy words!”

Trinity coughed, maybe to hide a laugh, or maybe to attract the attention that she had lost.

“Anyway, I think that the fortune cookies are responsible for our current predicament.”

“What did she say?” Edward asked Will.

“The fortune cookies are to blame.” He replied.

“I knew it!” Edward punched the air in victory.

Ruby discreetly tripped him.

“I get it,” Amber said, looking thoughtful. “When you read the fortune, we ended up here!”

“So it’s your fault!” Edward said, his face full of mud.

“No!” Trinity protested. “Amber’s the one who squashed the cookie!”

“But Will’s the one who pushed me!” She replied, pointing at the culprit.

“Because Edward pushed me!” he replied, momentarily forsaking their friendship.

“Hey, you were the one who grabbed the cookie!” Edward replied, glaring at the traitor.

“Hey!” Ruby shouted, getting everyone’s attention. “At least we know one thing.” She smiled sweetly at them. “It wasn’t my fault.”

Quite understandably, everyone was so surprised that they that they could only stare at the little rich girl. And they didn’t notice the ever-growing shadow behind them, until it was practically on top of them.

“What--” Trinity whispered before falling silent as she realized exactly what was obscuring the sky. Her classmate were in similar states of shock.

It was a enormous spaceship. A defiantly out-of-this-world flying saucer. As they watched in stunned silence, the ship fly over to the large boulders of rocks that Will had noticed before. A light blue colored stream of light shot out from underneath it, directly onto one of the boulders, which then rose into the air. The spaceship the carried the over-sized rock, and placed it in the clearing on their right. It repeated the action several times, while they only stared in stunned disbelief. And then, the spaceship flew away.

As it left, Amber was quite she that she heard cheers and war cries, but she still to stunned to care much.

“Was that--” she whispered.

“Yeah,” Will replied, for once not smirking.

“It’s Stonehenge.” Trinity whispered, in awe, not disbelief. You could practically see the stars in her eyes. “We just witnessed the making of Stonehenge!”

“W-who care,” Edward stuttered, taking a step backwards, only to fall down, right onto a forgotten fortune cookies, which, of course, broke.

“Opps.” he said, getting up. He snatched the fortune before any one else
could, and began to read.
You saw what was meant to be seen
Now witness what may not have been.


“NO!” Trinity shouted, but too late. The swirl of light surrounded them, and that was that.
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PostSubject: Re: The Mysteries of Love, Time & Fortune Cookies   Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:04 am

Wow. That was good. It reminds me of one of the stories you wrote. Artemis Fowl and the Fortune Cookies of Doom.

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PostSubject: Re: The Mysteries of Love, Time & Fortune Cookies   Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:13 am

Yup, it's based kind of off of that, but I changed some stuff. Thansk for reading it! Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: The Mysteries of Love, Time & Fortune Cookies   Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:15 am

Your welcome. What happened to that story anyway?

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PostSubject: Re: The Mysteries of Love, Time & Fortune Cookies   Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:20 am

I posted it on FF.net and a lot of people started getting kind of mad at me about Anar. They said she was a Mary Sue. So, I'm trying to get rid of her Mary Sueness, but I haven't had much luck so far since I have no idea what about her is MAry Suess Sad I'm thinking about just giving up on changing her and continuing with the story. DO you think she's a Mary Sue?
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PostSubject: Re: The Mysteries of Love, Time & Fortune Cookies   Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:22 am

Sort of. Sorry.

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PostSubject: Re: The Mysteries of Love, Time & Fortune Cookies   Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:24 am

Waw! Ok, I'll try harder or just get rid of her and then continue.
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PostSubject: Re: The Mysteries of Love, Time & Fortune Cookies   Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:28 am

Well, you don't have to get rid of her. Just give her flaws. You make her sound perfect.

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PostSubject: Re: The Mysteries of Love, Time & Fortune Cookies   Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:28 am

Hmm, ok, I'll work more on that then Very Happy Thanks for your input!
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PostSubject: Re: The Mysteries of Love, Time & Fortune Cookies   Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:37 am

You're welcome!

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